Some Mistakes In Your Papers, With Corrections

"But people don't understand is that he used to be a strong and powerful soldier."
--"is" is unnecessary because the "that" clause makes "he used to be a strong and powerful soldier" into a dependent clause.



hided
--The past tense of "hide" is "hid"


"As this, maybe the the relationship between we and our grandparents will be more closer."
--"closer" means "more close"; we don't need to say "more closer"
--should be "us and our grandparents"
--'As this' does not work as an introductory phrase. "Given this" might work, and "If this happens," might be better because its meaning is more obvious.




"So you need to know when and why you're hungry, what your body really needs, and the best diet snacks for each situation."
--This is a parallelism problem. Everything listed has to have the same form, so "and the best diet snacks..." doesn't work. "why you're hungry, what your body really needs, and what the best snacks for each situation are" works.



advice, not advices: "advice" does not take a plural.


"In Taiwan, the old generation was living in turmoil. The only thing they could do is to keep themselves alive. They are usually frugal and pure. However, our generation is living in peace and safety....We don't believe their stories and follow their advices."
--other than "advice," we probably also need to say "lived in turmoil" to make the verb tense less confusing.
--We also should write, "Consequently, they are usually frugal and poor" to make it clear that the old generation's personality is the result of the difficult past.


touched/touching


"This episode is really touched."
--Should be "The episode is really touching."

Two correct examples:
--"The movie was touching."
--"I was touched by the movie."


frustrated/frustrating

"I was frustrated by the exam."

"The exam was frustrating."

"We can also learn some strengthens from other ages. Therefore, I think the gap between different ages, for example, the gap between Bart and Abe, is not too wide to cross."

--We need to use dashes: "--for example, the gap between Bart and Abe--" because of the introductory phrase "for example"

--use "strengths," noth "strengthens" (which is a verb). Also, the "therefore" doesn't seem necessary.

This week, the Simpson episode tells us about that Bart's grandfather and he went to find the treasure.
--We need to add a "how" or the sentence will be a run-on sentence. "and how he went to find the treasure."


As a result, we should not stay up late and take a nap in evening.
--This is a bad sentence because it's not clear what "take a nap in the evening" means. We shouldn't take naps? Or we should instead of staying up late?


I have read the new book a half already.
--Should be, "I have read half of the book already."


This episode uses a very motif ending!
--Should be, "This episode uses an interesting motif at the end."

The content at the back was not as funny as the front, however, it was much more dramatic!
--Should be, "The content at the end of the show was not as funny as the content at the beginning; however, the end was much more dramatic at the beginning." <--Notice how I explain everything to make sure the reader understands. I use 'end' and 'beginning' again.


I think that our health world is destroying by the large numbers of fast food shops, specialy the kids'.
--Should be, "I think that our health is being destroyed by the large number of fast food shops, especially the kids' health." ("numbers" is okay, but personally I prefer "number")
"health world" seems like a confusing metaphor to me; it's common practice to say "our health" to mean "everyone's health."